Thursday, October 30, 2014

Halloweensie Writing Contest: A Spooky Fight

A pumpkin we carved yesterday


Here's my entry for Susanna Hill's Fourth Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest. The rules: write a Halloween story for children under 100 words, using the words broomstick, pumpkin, and creak.



A SPOOKY FIGHT
(96 words)

Once again we gathered round
to have our annual fight.
What kind of costumes should we wear
on this October night?

“Let’s find a sheet and cut some holes
—that will be enough,”
said Boo to Doo, who said, “No way.
That won’t be up to snuff.”

“A pumpkin cackling in the dark,
and broomsticks shooting flames.
Now that is something we could use
for trick or treating games.”

“But wait,” I said, “You miss the point.
We do not need to hide.”
I shook my chains and creaked the floor.
“Let’s be ourselves with pride.”






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36 comments:

  1. Such a cute twist! Love the rhythm of your poem.

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  2. Excellent twist and top notch rhyming. Go-go little ghosties!

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  3. Love this, Sylvia! Great rhyme and rhythm, great twist on costuming, and nice message about being yourself :) Cute and fun! Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie hysteria :)

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    1. I've missed way too many of these fun contests. Thanks for hosting such good ones.

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  4. Haha! I thought, Sylvia's got some cool photoshop skills when I saw the pumpkin photo! Great rhyming!

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    1. Yeah, I should figure out how to get that candlelit pumpkin effect.

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  5. Great meter and rhyme and I love the message about being oneself.

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  6. Nice rhythm. That's so tricky to pull off.

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  7. Excellent entry, Sylvia! I love the rhythm and the language! The pumpkin is sooo cool!

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    1. Thanks. With critique partners like Victoria and Renee, I get great advice on meter.

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  8. Very cool, Sylvia. Wishing you and your family a fun, thrilling Halloween!

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  9. Love it, Sylvia. Here's to being ourselves with pride!

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  10. Woohoo, Sylvia! You did it!! Those are great edits that now make your terrific poem! :)

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    1. Well, thanks to you and everyone else in the critique group who make me look good! :)

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  11. The "annual fight" was a great hook, and I was surprised to discover they were ghosts, not kids. Way to go. :)

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  12. Love the being themselves ending! Great rhythm!

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  13. Great pumpkin and love "Up to snuff!" Have to find out the origin of the phrase! Nice twist!

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    1. Oh yes. I love learning origins of phrases.

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  14. Love your pumpkin and your brave little ghosts being themselves!

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  15. Love the rhyme and the message! (It's economical, too.) :-)

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  16. Lovely rhyme and story. Excellent twist.

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  17. I really enjoyed that! Your rhyme and rhythm flowed nicely.

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